Friday, April 02, 2010

NaPoWriMo # 2

Prompt number two from Read Write Poem

Fall
In autumn leaves
collected in the rain
water pipe so
that when the clouds
came, cumulonimbus,
the gutters overflowed,
spilling in curtains onto
the veranda outside their
bedroom window.
They dreamed of
rivers, waterfalls,
the sighing of
tidal estuaries and
they woke each morning
with beads of moisture on
their brows.


10 comments:

lucychili said...

Great watery flow. =)

Stan Ski said...

Hi Pip - thanks for your visit and comment.
Love the way the overflowing gutters influence their dreams and reflect their perspiration.

swiss said...

cumulonimbus. surely one of my favourite words. a winner!

Rob Kistner said...

Liked this. Very glad no one was incontinent... ;)
...rob
Image & Verse

Rob Kistner said...

Liked this. Very glad no one was incontinent... ;)
...rob
Image & Verse

Jenna said...

Any poem starting with autumn leaves gets my utmost attention. I loved the imagery here. And "cumulonimbus," wow, what a word!

Ron. said...

Very fluid; greatly enjoyed. Salute.

Unknown said...

I love a poem I can visualize. These images rock!

Anonymous said...

Great poem. Works very well, but I think you need a comma in the first line.

Catherine said...

A simple scene, but well described - I enjoyed reading it